[Astrid]

ach der text ist für eine prüfung - und du denkst du kommst mit einem bier davon?!
spaß bei seite... ist nicht wirklich leicht den text zu kürzen ohne dabei groß den sinn rauszunehmen. man könnte höchstens den text anders schreiben indem man nicht einzeln auf die acts eingeht.. mal sehen.

Dear Sir or Madam,

last weekend, my son and I visited your "Circus Maximus". It was my son's birthdaypresent, and so I accepted the expensive price for the tickets. "It will be worth all the money" I thought. After waiting for 20 minuites to get into the Circus, we were finally guided to our seats. I was pretty disappointed, when I saw that the seats we were brought to. They were in the back and also behind a tentmast. You can imagine, that my son was not happy about this. After another 20 minuites, the show began. Half an hour too late. My son had already finished is popcorn, bored while waiting for the show. So I bought a second bag of overpriced popcorn. "It's my son's birthdaypresent, don't forget it!", I said to myself.
Finally, the show began. The circusdirector's german was so bad and had such a heavy english accent, that it was almost impossible for my son to understand him. So I had to translate everything simultainiously. Then, the actos.. Clowns, not funny at all. The ponies: in a very bad condition. The dogshow: boring. But there was one really exciting act. After the break, the lionshow was next. Suddenly two sticks of the cage broke, after the lion, falling backwards due to a heavy whiplash by the tamer, crashed against it. One huge male lion used the hole in the cage to escape. The audience was immediatly in panic. Everybody was trying to get out of the tent. The lion jumped into the people and snaped after a little girl, who was stuck in the crowd. When the Circusstaff finally shot at the lion, it was already too late. The girl's left arm was riped off. She was bleeding heavily. Thanks god, the ambulance which arrived 15 minuites later could stop the bleeding and save her life
If I sum up everything, I've to say that the shown things were definitly inadequate if you look at your prices. Take this letter as a base for improvements on your ticket pricing or on the actors.

Regards,
Astrid

jetzt ist es schon etwas gekürzt und die gute löwenäääktschn ist auch noch drinne

markus

ohne hallo und grüße 344 wörter um 144 zu viel
nein der text is eine vorbereitung für eine prüfung